
I turn up for about 1 in 50 of Sami’s prompts . In truth I don’t turn up to much at all these days.
But I have actually visited the catacombs a few times, though I had almost forgotten – that other life of mine being so far in the past. But since the catacombs themselves are all about past lives I thought that I might pay homage one more time.
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Christians lying in a row
Secret tunnels down below
Away from Roman prying eyes
Faithful man goes when he dies
This resting place, this final home
Here within the catacomb
Where I, an atheist at best
Am humbled, quietly impressed
By faith itself, by pure belief
By death that came as pure relief
Here rest believers of the past
Perhaps you’ve found your God at last
May your eyes still somehow see
The meaning of the mystery
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OK …. it doesn’t quite work. But it is 77 words!!
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Works fine and glad to see you are keeping those double entendre’s coming😂
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It does work!
‘By faith itself, by pure belief
By death that came as pure relief’ – I like the rhythm and repetition in these lines.
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Well thank you!
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Sure it works. I get it. Nicely done.
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Thank you Bill. It could do with a major edit, I suppose, as could everything I try to do. But life is short and so is 77 words.
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True and true. 🙂
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I don’t understand this: “it doesn’t quite work” because I thought it worked quite well on a number of different levels.
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Thank you Michael
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This is fantastic. Great rhythm.
~ I actually wonder how true this is… I don’t think those who harbored doubts had much room to express them…
Sincerely,
David
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Quite so, Ben. Nothing has changed all that much, and despite the illusion of ‘free speech’ people still feel very constrained by the pressure of the masses.
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