The ‘double, double rhyming haiku’.

Some of you may not be familiar with this unusual format that was popularised by Bart Mog back in the 60s or 70s when the west became especially interested in Japanese artistic expression. Just like all western attempts to assimilate eastern culture (Zen Buddhism is a classic example) the double, double rhyming haiku displays the total misunderstanding of the original intent in an attempt to make it palatable to foreign tastes (look what the English did to Indian food) and this one is no exception. An abomination, perhaps.

The rules are relatively obvious.

1. It must follow the traditional 5/7/5 pattern

2. It must be 6 lines (double haikus are, in fact, quite common).

3. It must be comprised of two seperate examples following the same rules and linked by a common theme.

4. It must be written by two different people.

This one belongs to myself and Meg, though it was originally inspired by Kate, here who, in turn, found her inspiration from D’verse, here. In this case the subject is the moon.

***

Missing you so much

Nights under the moon and such

So close I can touch

Your skin with my mind

Let this night the moonlight find

Us. Two of a kind

*

Looming in the sky
Makes me want to bay and howl
But I’m too uptight
So I’ll glance askance
At its lovely elegance
I’m sweetness and light
***

8 thoughts on “The ‘double, double rhyming haiku’.

    1. Here’s another almost forgotten format called ‘the nonsensical mixed metaphor poorly rhyming free form’ …. That I have created especially for you.

      A star between two moons
      Would smell as sweet
      At night
      As roses cut too soon
      Beneath the heat
      Of daylight
      And cut as deep
      As thorns
      Slice into sleep
      Perhaps to dream
      Or snore
      It would seem
      Do you know
      What I mean?

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