In response to http://Weekend Writing Prompt #377 – Reverberate A word
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Sister, I’m not feeling great
For in my head reverberate
Echoes of both love and hate
That words cannot enunciate
A thunderstorm which won’t abate
And blows towards expiry date
This mortal coil, the endless wait
Before the grave I bow to fate
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Come on! Give me a break! It’s difficult to express anything in 43 words, especially optimism.
Richmond Road 
Optimism? Ok. Good to see you☺️
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I love your poem, but it’s so sad! 43 words of optimism? Oh, it can be done. I’m up to the challenge.
The sun is shining in the sky
I absolutely must not die.
But when I do, my soul will go
Up high above where it will flow
Forever in eternity
Where I will always wait for thee.
And one day we will be together
For Heaven always lasts forever.
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Okay, so I went over a few words. More optimism!
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That’s really good Meg. But based upon observation it goes a bit further than optimism and into the area of fantasy. But you didn’t include the word ‘reverberate’ – so I’m putting it down as a win for me based on a technicality.
And ‘heaven always lasts forever’ – isn’t that a tautology? Hmmm … I think tautologies might be alright in poetry, within the rules. I still have no idea what poetry is, really.
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Note to self: google tautology! Oooh, okay, I googled! You got me there, darn it!! 😀 Oh drat, and I lost on a technicality? Darn! I hope you’ll be on hand to beta read for me in the rhyming story event!! Oh boy, it starts in a month!
Well yeah, embrace the fantasy, I say!! Yay!! Take optimism to new levels of Pollyanna bliss!
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